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I'm writing on a reward text for a Kickstarter crowdfunding campaign. Is it correct to set a comma in the sentence below or would an and or - make more sense in that context?

You'll get your name listed on our website, if you like along with a link to your Twitter profile.

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  • You definitely need a comma after if you like and before along with a link. – Carl Smith Nov 5 '14 at 16:36
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Some people resist them, but this seems to me a fine candidate for a parenthetical. You are offering a single reward that can vary slightly in nature based on the donor's preference. I think it's simple and clear to write:

You'll get your name (and a link to your Twitter profile, if you'd like) listed on our website.

This could be made even clearer if you ditch the slightly awkward "you'll get your" construction:

We'll list your name (and a link to your Twitter profile, if you'd like) on our website.

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  • Good answer. And nice phraseology ('this seems to me a fine candidate for a parenthetical'). The original is at best clumsy; I'm not trying to decide how acceptable the single-comma version is. (People who say that wrong punctuation isn't 'ungrammatical' can't dispute this terminology.) – Edwin Ashworth Nov 5 '14 at 14:18
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I suggest you rearrange the sentence thus:

If you like, you'll get your name listed on our website along with a link to your Twitter profile.

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  • I would understand your version of that sentence differently than the one in the question. – Em1 Nov 5 '14 at 13:17

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