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In the following sentence:

Anyone who has stumbled glumly through a British airport recently, trapped in endless queues, will already know the stench of bogus security hanging heavy in the air. I always knew at some subliminal level that even as my nail scissors were being seized by a censorious official,some monstrous breach the size of the Channel was blithely disregarded elsewhere.

The part which is bold seems incorrect to me. I think it should be "was being blithely".

Although if "while" was used as in, "while some monstrous breach the size of the Channel was blithely disregarded elsewhere", it would have been correct.

How should one ensure parallelism between something which is happening now and something in past which still happens?

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Your exemplar isn't bad. I would alter it slightly, for even better parallelism.

"Anyone who has stumbled glumly through a British airport recently, trapped in endless queues, will already know how the stench of bogus security hangs heavy in the air. I always knew at some subliminal level that even as a censorious official was sadistically seizing my nail scissors, a lackadaisical security guard was blithely disregarding some monstrous breach the size of the Channel."

In my version, the parallelism is more uniform: the censorious official parallels the lackadaisical guard, and the sadistically seizing parallels the blithely disregarding. As for my addition of how, it may not be necessary, but I like it anyway.

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