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The tree was thick and tall as a watch tower. Its branches resembled twisted arms, and they had so few leaves you could count them with your fingers. Like some kind of parasites, moss covered almost the totality of its surface—which in itself was filled with curves, holes, and other deformities.

I'm not sure why I placed it there. At first I only wrote which, but I felt something was missing.

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I would simplify the sentence to insure the reader understands the curves and holes refer to the surface and not the moss:

Like some kind of parasite, moss covered the totality of its surface--a surface filled with curves, holes, and other deformities.

Note the singular for parasite.

  • I see. I guess repetition is useful sometimes. – janoChen Jun 6 '14 at 1:44
  • I like your writing style. Since I am only a Student and not an Editor, feel free to ignore my comments – Gary's Student Jun 6 '14 at 1:49

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