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While a full Major League Baseball season is 162 games, the first round of the playoffs is only a 5 game series. I feel that this system is inequitable because the length of the opening playoff series is disproportionate to that of the MLB season.

The bolded sentence above feels wrong:

  • Would "this discrepancy" work better than "this system" in the above sentence?
  • Is there a clearer/stronger way to express the opinion that "X is inequitable because Y is disproportionate to Z?"
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    Definitely looks wrong to me but is that just because of a rogue "opening"? – Rupe May 23 '14 at 15:34
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    Ok, it no longer feels wrong after your edit. But now, I'm not really sure what it's trying to say. Perhaps that's partly because I don't know much about Baseball. Are you saying that you think the first playoff series should be more than 5 games? If so, why? As I understand it, the playoff series would be between 2 teams, while the league season will have involved a lot more teams (all playing each other, home and away?). So it's not clear to me in what sense it's appropriate to compare the 5 with the 162. – Rupe May 23 '14 at 15:42
  • @Rupe thanks. "Are you saying that you think the first playoff series should be more than 5 games? If so, why?" Yes, because the season is so long in comparison to the first round of the playoffs. It seems unfair that a team could be eliminated after losing a mere 3 games given the 162 games are needed to get to that point. – njboot May 23 '14 at 15:46
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    Also, I can't see how it's "inequitable". Surely, whatever one thinks about the number of matches, both teams in the playoff series are in the same situation? Sorry, not sure if I'm getting off-topic here! With regard to the bullet-pointed question, I'm fine with the construction of the sentence "X is inequitable because Y is disproportionate to Z". It's just that in the specific case I'm not convinced that either "inequitable" or "disproportionate" is the right word to be using. – Rupe May 23 '14 at 16:19
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    @Rupe - Baseball has multiple matches because it better tests the depth of a team. One pitcher can dominate a game, but he can't play each day. It is more like cricket than football. – Oldcat May 23 '14 at 17:08
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I think the original sentence is slightly better. Using discrepancy makes it seem redundant or circular: being disproportionate is similar to having a discrepancy. It would also require the reader to recognize that the first sentence describes a discrepancy in the first place; this isn't obvious, since it's common for post-season playoffs and finals to be shorter than regular season play, because fewer teams are involved. So the reader's reaction might be "What discrepancy? It's apples and oranges." So prior to referring to this discrepancy, you should make it clear that you think this constitutes a discrepancy. But this is effectively what you're doing in the original sentence by saying that the system is inequitable because of the difference in lengths.

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The bolded sentence sounds fine/clear enough to me. Either system or discrepancy would work as the subject.

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