Does the way I wrote the following sentence make sense?

The story begins with Olaf speaking about his experiences and perception of life.

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It does make sense, but you could also say:

The story begins with Olaf relating his experiences and perceptions of life.


"Cool story, Hansel!"

Yes, it makes sense. Although I might change it to say: "experiences and perceptions of life." (That way experiences and perceptions are both plural.)

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