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Sorry, the title is a bit confusing... basically, which of the following is correct?

Without a comma:

Cory Doctorow, author of Little Brother, the book you had me read during a camping trip which I loved for its realistic nature is quoted here.

With a comma:

Cory Doctorow, author of Little Brother, the book you had me read during a camping trip which I loved for its realistic nature, is quoted here.

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The clause beginning with the book and ending with nature is an interruption to the sentence, and needs to be set off by a pair of commas, and so a comma is needed after nature to match the one after Little Brother.

There’s another point. Is the clause which I loved for its realistic nature intended as a defining or non-defining relative clause? I suspect the latter: it provides additional information, and doesn’t define the book. If that is the case, then the convention is to set it off by a pair of commas as well. If you accept my view of the clause the book . . . nature, there will already be a comma at the end of the relative clause, but a comma after trip would show that which I loved . . . is to be read as a non-defining relative clause.

My final version, then, would be:

Cory Doctorow, author of Little Brother, the book you had me read during a camping trip, which I loved for its realistic nature, is quoted here.

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  • Instead of a comma, you could even add and between trip and which. For me, that removes the possible ambiguity as to whether the book or the trip were loved for their realistic nature.
    – oerkelens
    Feb 9, 2014 at 8:40
  • @Barrie England - I agree with your grammatical analysis, but in terms of punctuation, would suggest that using em dashes rather than commas around the relative clause to give visual clarity, and make it easier to follow the line of thought, eg 'Cory Doctorow, author of Little Brother— the book you had me read during a camping trip, which I loved for its realistic nature—is quoted here.' Feb 9, 2014 at 8:41
  • Perhaps, but the OP was asking about commas. Feb 9, 2014 at 8:47
  • @BarrieEngland - agreed that OP is asking about commas, but do you think there is comma overload here? I feel that parentheses or dashes would improve the sentence considerably. Feb 9, 2014 at 9:22
  • I don't. I have an aversion to dashes, at least in formal writing, and parentheses reduce the significance of their contents in a way which I don't think would be desirable here. There are, of course, all sorts of other ways of expressing the writer's thoughts. Feb 9, 2014 at 9:31

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