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What is the best way to phrase and punctuate this type of "this = that" sentence?

No noise was detected, indicating that the room was empty.

No noise was detected, which indicated that the room was empty.

Thanks, EM

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    Almost related: I'm wondering why you are focusing solely on the use of which when the use of that in this sentence seems at least as optional. I might prefer "No noise was detected, indicating the room was empty." from a minimalist perspective. Feb 7 '14 at 19:58
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Personally, I'd use:

No noise was detected, suggesting an empty room.

'Indicates' seems a bit too certain for a mere absence of sound.

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Those are both perfectly fine.

I prefer the second just because the first seems to spell things out a little too much, as if assuming the reader must be dim, but in another sentence with the same structure I might prefer it precisely because it spells things out that slight bit more.

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Both of your sentences are phrased and punctuated correctly.

Here's a couple of alternatives, removing "that":

No noise was detected, indicating the room was empty.

No noise was detected, which indicated the room was empty.

I prefer the first of these alternatives, since it's a bit simpler (as BlackVegetable mentioned).

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