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I've got a sentence like this:

A will impose B on and further be affected by C

The two verbs have nothing in common, they both just put A in some relation to C. As C is quite long I don't want to write two sentences.

Is this correct English? If yes, were do I put my commas?

Is there a nicer way to write this?

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    If C is quite long, it might be better to use two sentences rather than add complexity with commas (which set off the parenthetical phrase and further be affected by). Perhaps you could give real-world examples instead of A, B and C?
    – Andrew Leach
    Jan 22, 2014 at 14:16
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    There are examples of constructions like this in the wild, but not all that many. Finding one from the 19th century (they seem more common nowadays) From this book He believes that Le Breton … was surprised by, and yielded to a great temptation. Jan 22, 2014 at 16:46
  • But in that case B and C are the same thing so it make more sense.
    – Oldcat
    Feb 26, 2014 at 20:08
  • If C is long, that is what pronouns were invented for. A will be affected by C. A will therefore impose B on them (or it).
    – Oldcat
    Feb 26, 2014 at 20:10

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The sentence as you have written it is very unclear. Is A affected by C? Or is B affected by C? The traditional structure for this would be:

A will impose B on, and further be affected by, C

A more elegant way of writing this would be:

A will impose B on C and will further be affected by the latter/former.

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