I want to bend English a bit and put weird elements into position one, mirroring the more idiomatic constructions there are. Here's the "standard"sentence
The rule is clear, but it makes no sense and people do not care.
And here's what I'd like to do with it
The rule is clear, but sense it makes not and care people do not.
Once again... I know that this is not proper English but I feel that it is still in the grey zone and I have little doubt that people would understand me if I was say that. But I want to write it.
- How would I punctuate this?
- Should I use commas or hyphens or nothing? What's the easiest for a reader to comprehend and parse?