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Life for this sparrow is very hard, but even so, she had a pleasant character. Then an eagle fell in love with her. He explained to her:

I did not adore you because you could make an adorable sparrow merely out of discomfort, distress, and even sorrow. No, you could not. I love you because you had built such an attractive and agreeable character, on such an imperfect and precarious basis. (self-made)

My purpose is to say that adversities themselves did not make the sparrow cute, but the fact that she became a cute on adverse conditions. I doubt that “make… out of” means the same as “build…on the basis of”, and thus that all my words finally means nothing.

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  • I would use would instead of could. She cannot make a sparrow (e.g. create a sparrow), but would make a sparrow (e.g. be a sparrow)
    – mplungjan
    Dec 4 '13 at 8:42
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You can use this phrase but your particular example is a little hard to understand. A more traditional usage:

We make soldiers out of sweat, blood and tears.

It does mean "build" but it isn't really paired with "on the basis of"; it would mean "out of these materials."

We build soldiers out of sweat, blood and tears.

We make houses out of wood.

We build houses out of wood.

This means your third sentence has a similar problem:

I love you because you had built such an attractive and agreeable character, on such an imperfect and precarious basis.

I recommend:

I love you because you built such an attractive and agreeable character in spite of such imperfect and precarious circumstances.

The entire example:

I did not adore you simply because you made an adorable sparrow out of your discomfort, distress, and sorrow. No, you could not. I love you because you built such an attractive and agreeable character in spite of such imperfect and precarious circumstances.

There are a few other minor touch-ups I would perform on the paragraph but this should directly address your specific concern.

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