2

I wrote the following:

The sun hit Erin's skin as she wandered through the alley. It felt comfortable, like a warm blanket enveloping her entire body.

"Hit" is the only verb I could think of. But I wonder if there's a "gentler" verb to replace it?

6

There's really a lot of possible verbs you could use. I've seen:

  • touched
  • caressed
  • brushed
  • "lingered on"
  • warmed
  • gleamed on

to name the first that come to mind.

Edit: I reread the title of your question, why not "fell"?

The sun gently fell on Erin's skin as she wandered through the alley. It felt comfortable, like a warm blanket enveloping her entire body.

  • You're right. Thanks for your suggestions. I liked touched and caressed. – janoChen Sep 3 '13 at 18:12
  • 1
    Each one links to a different metaphor theme, with different affordances and associations. Choose the metaphor and the rest of the words come easier. – John Lawler Sep 3 '13 at 18:40
  • If you're not going for a metaphor or further description of the effect, "reached" (along with "fell on") would also work – JeffSahol Sep 3 '13 at 18:57
  • 1
    I second the question in this edit. Why use a word like "fell" in the question title, but "hit" in the sentence itself? – J.R. Sep 3 '13 at 22:07
5

How about shone? It can be used to refer to any lit surface or lighting source

  • Well, I guess I missed the obvious with my list. +1 – Jacobm001 Sep 3 '13 at 21:43
1

I like "smiled on" for this set.

1

The sun embraced Erin's skin as she wandered through the alley. It felt comfortable, like a warm blanket enveloping her entire body

The sun kissed Erin's skin as she wandered through the alley...

  • lit
  • cosseted
0

Erin sunned herself as she walked through the alley. It felt comfortable on her skin, like a warm blanket enveloping her entire body.

Not the answer you're looking for? Browse other questions tagged or ask your own question.