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I am writing a thesis and I have the following sentence: The section [...] shows the reader, that [...]

I am not sure about the "shows the reader"?

Should I use it or just "shows"?

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    Writing advice requests are off topic. If you have a specific concern or question about the phrase "shows the readers" please edit the question to explain what it is.
    – MetaEd
    Commented Aug 9, 2013 at 22:46
  • They do not mean the same. Decide according to what you like to convey.
    – Kris
    Commented Aug 12, 2013 at 8:14

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Here are a few different options. You could say:

  • This section explains (to the reader)
  • This section demonstrates (to the reader)
  • This section leads the reader to believe...

With the "to the reader" being optional in both cases, but only if it makes sense in context (obviously).

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    I feel that indicating 'the section' as agent is not wonderful style. I'd prefer 'In section 2, it is shown that ...' or 'In section 2, ... is explained / discussed / demonstrated.' Commented Aug 9, 2013 at 23:18
  • @EdwinAshworth, to treat a section as an agent is a common and simple metaphor. To do so is not a style problem. Writing a weak and wordy passive form when you can write an active sentence is a style problem. Commented Aug 12, 2013 at 15:15
  • Why did I get a down vote?
    – Ryan Stull
    Commented Aug 12, 2013 at 15:26

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