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Assume that I am advertising that a payment will be asked only if we actually execute a given job right, and I say:

"if we don't do it right, we have been working for free"

"if we won't do it right, we have been working for free"

"if we don't do it right, we would have been working for free"

Can you tell me what is the most effective and correct way to express (advertise) the idea (especially the correct choice of verbs), and are the above sentences wrong ?

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Are you describing how you work, or are you advertising your way of working? Your text says you are advertising, but your examples are all descriptive in nature.

If you are describing a current job where you know that you will be paid only if you do your job properly:

If we don’t do it right, we will have been working for free

If on the other hand you are actually advertising that you only charge for work done right:

If we don’t do it right, our work is free
If we don’t do it right, you don’t pay

would both be better options.

You could even make it rhyme:

If we don’t do okay, you don’t have to pay

  • Yes thanks Janus. The intention was to put out an actual advertisement. In other words, the client would be asked to pay only if really satisfied. If not, our work would have been "for free" (no payment asked). Wanted it to sound like a fact. A way we work. – Nada Jul 15 '13 at 23:53
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    Janus, check the questions if they are off-topic or otherwise close-worthy before answering. – Kris Jul 18 '13 at 6:37

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