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For your perusal and evaluation, I have enclosed my curriculum vitae for further information.

My main problem with this sentence is the double usage of the word for. My idea was to replace it with with, would that be better?

Just clarifying: This is at the end of paragraph in which I describe my skills and such.

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  • How about "as further information"; "which contains further information" (the latter is preferable). – St John of the Cross Mar 28 '13 at 10:39
  • @StJohnoftheCross Good find, I like them both, you should write it out as an answer. – DontTellAnyone Mar 28 '13 at 10:41
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edit Replacing 'for' with 'with' would be better, or even confider 'containing', or 'which contains'.

Maybe consider

Please find enclosed my CV, which contains my education and employment history since [relevant date].

Original:

I used to write like this in format job-seeking circumstances, but the whole style comes across as very stiff.

That said, if you want to keep the sentence, I would suggest you consider if you want to include both 'perusal' and 'evaluation'; I found it a bit clunky, and it doesn't really add anything apart from some 'big words'. Remember, the guys who are reading your CV are just normal people too, with other jobs to do, and may groan (as I do) when they keep hearing these buzz words.

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