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I saw this message on an advert:

Get a high speed connection without roaming charges instantly.

I am pretty sure that a better way to say it is:

Instantly get a high speed connection without roaming charges.

If I am right about the first construction being wrong/poor, is there a name for the abusage? I run across such constructions fairly regularly.

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  • Here's another one: Glad to see your email finally. (instead of finally see)
    – ottodidakt
    Commented Feb 26, 2015 at 17:01

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Both versions are grammatically correct. Your version (with the adverb at the front) would probably be more common in most writing or speech — it is slightly unusual for an adverb to get separated from its verb phrase by another adverbial phrase like this. In this case it seems OK (at least to my ear); but I’d agree that in some cases the separated version can really be quite horrible, to the point of being ungrammatical; compare:

Sally ate the cake quickly with great pleasure.

?Sally ate the cake with great pleasure quickly.

However, in advertising (like in headline-writing), writers are trying to fulfil a lot of other demands in a very small space, so somewhat unusual phrasings often occur. In this case, putting “Get a high-speed roaming connection” first makes the subject of the ad more immediately clear, and putting “instantly” last gives the phrase a good punchy ending. I’d guess these are the sorts of things the writer had in mind.

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I don't think the "instantly" applies to how fast you can get a high speed connection.

It would rather apply to how fast you start having increasing charges as soon as you get said high speed connection.
In that sense, the construction is adequate.

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    Knowing phone companies, that may well be the case — but I’m sure that the meaning the writers intended was the OP’s interpretation, “Get a high-speed connection […] instantly”.
    – PLL
    Commented Jan 28, 2011 at 5:19
  • @PLL: I really don't think so. I rather see that as a direct reference to the infamous "iphone bill" ( youtube.com/watch?v=UdULhkh6yeA )
    – VonC
    Commented Jan 28, 2011 at 5:23
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    It's what read as well. The sentence is poorly phrased. Nontheless lot of people will not read excetly the way what you and I do.
    – Mr.X
    Commented Jan 28, 2011 at 6:13
  • LOL... The intention of the advertisement got changed.
    – Gopinath
    Commented Jan 28, 2011 at 7:08
  • +1 for translating marketing-speak into plausible reality.
    – T.Rob
    Commented Aug 24, 2011 at 2:55

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