Working on a scene where a character is repeatedly struck down by having objects thrown at her, starting the scene with the sound she would make after being hit with a ball made of solid ice.
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Sounds like what? Can you link to audio/video examples?– NVZ ♦Commented Jan 14, 2017 at 3:43
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It’s probably something like uummpf– JimCommented Jan 14, 2017 at 3:49
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If it were me it would probably be "Shit!"– Hot LicksCommented Jan 14, 2017 at 4:08
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Ba Dum Tss!– NVZ ♦Commented Jan 14, 2017 at 4:47
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Are you looking for a word that one of your characters would pronounce? If it is just for directions/description, why do you need to find the right onomatopoeia? Not that you shouldn't; just wondering what the use case really is.– DrewCommented Jan 14, 2017 at 5:24
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Assuming you mean the vocal sound the person makes, then perhaps oof. From Oxford Dictionaries:
EXCLAMATION
Expressing discomfort, as from sudden exertion or a blow to one's body.
Example usage:
he gloated, as he formed a large icy snowball in his fat fingers. Then he said, ”Oof!” A large, hard snowball had caught him in the stomach. (Merv Lambert, Beware of the Emu!, 2012)
I think you're looking for dialogue, but if you're looking for narration you might still be able to use this.
It is also occasionally used as a verb, especially in indirectly reported speech:
“I don't—” she began, then “oofed” as the wraith suddenly became corporeal and shoved her back a few feet. (Scott Ciencin, Age of Unreason, 2012)
Finally, it might possibly be echoic enough that you could also use it for the physical sound of the ice hitting her body, especially if she's wearing a puffy coat.
