I am confused. Is using while correct in the following sentence:
Most students are able to expertly manage their time while they work along with their other responsibilities.
Is it correct to use while or I should change the whole sentence?
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1@WS2 - Using whilst in the US would get you some strange looks.– Hot LicksCommented Dec 19, 2015 at 13:58
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1@HotLicks Your point being?– WS2Commented Dec 19, 2015 at 22:33
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1@HotLicks It's not idiomatic in Timbuktu either. So what?– WS2Commented Dec 20, 2015 at 0:11
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1@WS2 - I personally hate the word 'whilst' and would always prefer 'while.' Whilst just sounds pretentious, even in the UK. Much like people who use 'utilise' instead of 'use.' That's just personal opinion though.– JascolCommented Mar 18, 2016 at 11:38
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1@Jascol If it was good enough for Shakespeare it is good enough for me.– WS2Commented Mar 18, 2016 at 13:27
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Use of while is fine in the middle of a sentence like this. The use will be in the following way: Most students are able expertly to manage their time while working, along with their other responsibilities.
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I work along with my coworkers, not along with my other responsibilities. I think there's a missing comma before "along" in the original which you dropped before you rewrote the sentence. Commented Apr 17, 2016 at 13:31
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Yes, I agree. The comma will shift from before "while". Commented Apr 18, 2016 at 18:30
Your usage is correct. But I would adjust it a bit to read:
Most students are able to expertly manage their time while working along their other responsibilities.
answered Sep 19, 2015 at 9:59
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2That doesn't flow, IMHO. "working along their other responsibilities" doesn't seem like a proper verb phrase.– BarmarCommented Sep 20, 2015 at 3:09