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Could someone please verify the grammar in this sentence? Particularly the use of 'her' (should it be she?) and the implied 'her' after the and. Should there be a second 'her'?

"They sought treatment for symptoms related to her already diagnosed Generalized Anxiety Disorder and marked episodes of anger and oppositional behavior. "

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Seems perfectly fine as is. –  Jim Oct 21 '12 at 23:04
    
Thanks Jim. I appreciate the time. –  1c1cle Oct 21 '12 at 23:07
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Diagnosed and marked are passive participles modifying the following nouns, not verbs cast in the past tense. "Symptoms related to her ... GAD and ... episodes" is the object of the preposition "for". –  StoneyB Oct 21 '12 at 23:32
    
I don't want to leave this question unanswered. Jim or Stoney, if either of you want to copy your comment into answer, please do. Thanks, both, for your help. –  1c1cle Oct 22 '12 at 2:04
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For readability, I would make it a little clearer what parts of speech diagnosed and marked have in this sentence. Grammatically, you have correctly expressed that diagnosed refers to her GAD and marked is an adjective referring to her episodes, but someone skimming the sentence may not immediately appreciate that. Instead, perhaps:

They sought treatment for symptoms related to her already-diagnosed Generalized Anxiety Disorder, and her marked episodes of anger and oppositional behavior.

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Thanks. I changed already to previously. –  1c1cle Oct 22 '12 at 20:37
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