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I wrote a song for a play I'm writing where I utilize a degree of early modern english, it's not entirely in archaic prose as for many audiences that would be a turn off, as its a comedy and a pastiche so it's only lightly used and blended with more modern conversation. Think 'Kiss Me Kate' but when I do use I'm trying to make sure I'm using the grammar correctly and not wrong. As I said I wrote a song for it, during a "play within a play" scene and I'm having some trouble figuring out if I'm conjugating some of the verbs correctly, a lot of these are I think the imperative since the character is asking/commanding something of someone else so I'm a bit confused. Can anyone make any corrections for me? The song is addressing the moon as if it were a person; i.e. the goddess Diana

Pale moon, pale moon go fade

into the night away, adrift

for sad light, sad light is lade

by thy face white and cold. O how swift

(O how swift)

I get lost and turned quick a fool

in moth hours wan and blue

under thy silvered shone. O who’ll

beareth the heft (beareth the heft)

of this folly that runneth me through?

(For in truth I’ve given all my sprigs of rue,

offered up all sprigs of rue.)

O spare my heart and spare my head

from thy hunt, thy fleet and forest train.

No hounds, no hounds that teareth and shred,

they art not mine (not mine) this bane.

Let me alone, alone my eyes to sleep

I bid thou sink into the mirror’d sea

and cease, cease, a sabled state so deep,

bringest good reason back to me.

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Proof reading is off-topic (see the FAQ) but in any case verb endings are almost entirely regular: Wikipedia on Early Modern English. –  Andrew Leach Sep 22 '12 at 21:42
    
Thanks! You guys can close it. –  user26393 Sep 22 '12 at 21:43
    
Anything goes in poetry and song lyrics as long as it sounds good. It's off-topic here what sounds good. –  Mitch Sep 22 '12 at 21:50
    
You can't close/delete your own question? –  Mitch Sep 22 '12 at 21:51
    
If you use "teareth", shouldn't you use "shreddeth". But I guess that wouldn't rhyme. –  Peter Shor Sep 22 '12 at 23:34
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closed as general reference by Andrew Leach, Carlo_R., StoneyB, Gnawme, Matt Эллен Sep 22 '12 at 23:38

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