I need to write a list that I cannot find a great parallel construction for because certain items in the list use "of" and one uses "to".
The sentence as originally written:
Ratification, acceptance and approval of a treaty or accession to it shall be conducted when it is required by the treaty.
I've been contemplating the following re-write:
Ratification of, acceptance of, approval of, or accession to a treaty shall be conducted when required by the treaty.
A treaty shall be ratified, accepted, approved, or acceded to by the State when the treaty so requires.
Any other ideas on how to construct this sentence in a readable and grammatically correct way?
EDIT: I noticed the question on passive voice recently posted as well. The third example would be a case where passive voice is arguably preferable as the emphasis of this sentence should be the treaty and not the State.