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I’m currently searching for the title of my research thesis and I can’t find a good phrase.

I did a “Systematic Analysis of fruit growth” in a generic way and additionally applied the analysis to apples.

Regarding the content I thought of the following title:

  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth at the example of apples”
  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth exemplify by apples”

Both sound awkward and might even be not correct (they sound incorrect to me)

I came up with the following other possibilities:

  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth demonstrated on apples”
  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth taking the example of apples”
  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth applied on apples”
  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth using apples as a case study”
  • “Systematic Analysis of the fruit growth demonstrated on apples as a case study”

None of these really fits what I wanted to say. I would go for the first one, but I’m not sure whether “demonstrate” might be to informal and one might think of a “demonstration” (show on a stage).

Is there another correct phrase for “at the example of ”?

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Is it an actual fruit growth you're studying - like a wart or a tumour - or are you studying the way in which fruit grows? If the latter, don't use "the" (or "a"). –  Lunivore Jan 26 '12 at 15:12
    
Neither, its just an example, the topic is more complicated and contains many words not everybody might understand, so I replaced the words. The the does not matter, but thanks for the hint. –  theomega Jan 26 '12 at 15:33
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Ah. The words might actually matter. For instance, you can apply gene splicing to apples, apply pest spray on apples, demonstrate fruit growth with apples... it depends whether the apples intrinsically hold an example of the phenomenon you're studying, or are an example subject to which you apply something to study the phenomenon, etc. –  Lunivore Jan 26 '12 at 16:44
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How important are the apples? "Systematic Analysis of fruit growth: a case study" is a pattern I see a lot. –  Monica Cellio Jan 26 '12 at 17:30
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You have some English usage problems in your question. I'm hesitant to edit your question since it might change its intent, but I will do so to help you with the correct forms. So let me just point out that " at the example of apples" should be "by" or "through" the example of apples; "exemplify by apples" should be "exemplified by apples", "applied on apples" should be "applied to apples". –  Mark Beadles Jan 26 '12 at 18:33
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Systematic analysis of fruit growth exemplified by apples

sounds good.

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Or *Systematic analysis of fruit growth in apples*— although I suppose that could be misconstrued as limiting the treatment solely to apples. –  choster Jan 26 '12 at 15:45
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Though @Will came up with the right word to directly replace "at the example of", I like your "Systematic Analysis of fruit growth using apples as a case study" (minus the "the"), since it says exactly what it is, a case study (assuming you actually did one).

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I like this one, except for the extra 'the'. –  Hellion Jan 26 '12 at 15:15
    
Woah, didn't notice that...will edit. –  JeffSahol Jan 26 '12 at 15:44
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Two options using case study, depending on the primary focus:

Systematic Analysis of fruit growth: a case study

Apples: a case study of systemic analysis of fruit growth

I'm not an academic, but the papers I encounter at technical conferences often use "case study" and rarely use "example".

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+1 for the first suggestion. The second suggestion seems awkward to me , because it's probably not a case study of systematic analysis, but rather, a case study exemplifying systematic analysis. (But I could be wrong.) –  ruakh Jan 26 '12 at 19:58
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You shouldn’t say “at the example of” – don’t use “at”. Maybe “using the example of”. But in any case, for a title this is rather long-winded and awkward, even for the normally long-winded and awkward titles of academic papers.

Without knowing anything about your paper, I’d be more likely to choose something like, “Systematic Analysis of Fruit Growth: A Case Study on Apples”.

I’m hard-pressed to state a rule to justify this, but I think the word “example” is rarely appropriate in a title in the way you’re trying to use it. Maybe a case like, “Economic Devastation of Civil War: The Liberian Example”. But if you’re creating the example, then you tend to call it a “case study”. And even in my Liberian example, it would be at least as good to say, “Economic Devastation of Civil War: A Liberian Case Study”.

For a non-title, i.e. text within the body of a discussion, I might say something like, “We performed a systematic analysis of fruit growth using apples as an example.”

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I would use

Analysis of Fruit Growth: A Case Study on Apples

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