Drawing an equivalence between X and Y is a standard English expression which runs into problems when X and/or Y is itself a comma-delimited list.
Slave_jed, "slavery", in BDSM terms, really should be written in inverted commas. It's a completely different thing to real slavery. Drawing an equivalence between torture, false imprisonment, and rape on the one hand and a sexual kink on the other is highly insulting.
In the quote above, I framed X and Y with on the one hand and on the other. Is this the best way to fix this or is there a more elegant phrasing I could have used?