My goal in asking this question is to learn to name my errors. I write many sentences and think, "that's not right," and then I change it to make it sound better. It usually works well (and my boss is happy) but I want to know why they are not right.
My current problem sentence is in bold: We dream of the day when our services are no longer needed, but know that the demand continues to increase. Furthering this demand is the ever-expanding awareness of our resources.
I would change it to: This demand is furthered by the ever-expanding awareness of our resources. (Feel free to provide suggestions on this one to, or tell me what grammar terms you would use to define how I have changed this).
Context: I am writing a fundraising proposal and trying to explain why the demand for our published resources is increasing. We provide services to the poor.