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Which kind of sentence is more correct:

a. We decided to present you Jim, Department Manager of Sam, as a contact person for ...

b. We decided to present you Jim, Department Manager which employs Sam, as a contact person for ...

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Could you provide some more context for this? – Steve Melnikoff Sep 8 '10 at 14:20
For example: We'd like introduce some person to another person. – misho Sep 8 '10 at 14:26
Also the relative which shouldn't be used for animate, especially human things. Use who here instead. – Charlie Sep 9 '10 at 8:12
@itrekkie: thanks! – misho Sep 9 '10 at 9:54
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Neither of those sentences sounds quite right.

If I've understood correctly, perhaps something like this might be appropriate:

We've decided to appoint you, Jim, as a contact person for Sam, given that you're his department manager.

EDIT: The questioner has clarified that the context is introducing one person to another. In that case, perhaps this would be appropriate:

This is Jim, Sam's department manager. He'll be the contact for X.

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Agreed. Shorter sentences are almost always better in business situations, where clarity is more important than quality prose. – OneProton Sep 8 '10 at 16:26

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