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I'm wondering if there is a better way to write this:

Lesser of actual physical damage or $1,500 per occurrence.

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closed as unclear what you're asking by tchrist, John Lawler, JLG, p.s.w.g, TrevorD Jul 29 '13 at 22:57

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I'm not sure that's a sentence, since there is no verb. –  Thomas Jul 29 '13 at 20:49
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This is a question for a lawyer who practices in a country where the laws and the courts are both in English. Not a grammarian. –  John Lawler Jul 29 '13 at 21:06
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This question appears to be off-topic because it is about advice on legal wording. –  TrevorD Jul 29 '13 at 22:57
    
@ Thomas according to Halliday and Matthiessen (2004:6), a sentence is any collection of words that lie between a capital letter and a full stop. Besides that, you don't appear to be answering anything other than your own [undecided] thinking. –  Qube Jul 30 '13 at 6:49

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[...] the cost of the damage, not to exceed $1,500 per occurrence [...]

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Better is going to get you opinions, but since this seems to be something designed for a legal-esque document it's probably acceptable. Usually I see the sentence constructed as "... actual physical damage or $1,500, whichever is less, per occurrence" which flows more nicely in my opinion.

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I would not say "whichever is lower" but "whichever is less". –  GEdgar Jul 29 '13 at 20:55
    
@Amory, Yes, it is a legal-type document, so my options and space are limited. I was curious if there was a shorter/sweeter way of writing it without distorting the message. –  user48748 Jul 29 '13 at 20:57
    
Amor, could "whichever be lower" a correct alternative form? If so, what is the difference using be rather than is? –  user19148 Jul 29 '13 at 22:07
    
Thanks GEdgar. No, be is not correct as "be" is the infinitive form. Personally, though, I like GetzelR's version as well. –  Amory Jul 29 '13 at 22:40

There are actually three fundamental problems with the original phrase, additional to the item you have asked about:

Lesser of actual physical damage or $1,500 per occurrence.

  1. You are not comparing like with like: you cannot compare "physical damage" with a sum of money! What (I assume) you mean to refer to is the cost of repairing the actual physical damage.
  2. The correct construction is not the "lesser of A or B": it should be "lesser of A and B".
  3. "Occurrence" of what? If you are talking about damage to a vehicle, does "occurrence" refer to each separate area of damage on the vehicle even if all damage was caused by the same incident? Or does it mean "per hire period"? I am assuming it means "per incident", i.e. per each separate occasion on which damage was caused. But you need to think about that.

I would suggest something like:

... the lesser of the actual cost of repair and $1,500 per incident.

But equally, you could use wording similar to that suggested by @GetzelR, such as:

... the actual cost of repair, up to a maximum of $1,500 per incident.

But really, if you are writing a legal document, you should be consulting a lawyer. The cost of getting it wrong, could easily outweigh the cost of employing a lawyer.

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