I wrote the following as part of an article in the making:
Diverse fields such as medicine, sociology, and marketing require the collection, analysis, and publication of large amounts of personal data. At some stage during this process it becomes imperative, for the protection of individual privacy, that such data be sanitized to remove information that could potentially identify some set of personal data as belonging to a certain individual.
Is "becomes imperative ... that such data be sanitized" good style? Is the above OK, in general?