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Which sentence sounds better or correct ?

  1. I have acquired many characteristics that will play a valuable role in my profession.
  2. I have acquired many characteristics that will be valuable in my profession.
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Aren't there a resume writing help/books/forums all over the web? Otherwise this is going to be a very slow process, sentence by sentence. –  Chris Jan 24 '13 at 0:49
    
If you must use one of those sentences, use #2. "Play a valuable role" is an obnoxious verbosity better replaced by "will be valuable". There's no need for the cliched acting metaphor of "play a valuable role". –  user21497 Jan 24 '13 at 0:57
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This has to be "opinion only".

Neither sounds marvellous to me.
I'd look for something more like

  • "I have acquired many professionally valuable characteristics"

and even that I like less than I'd like to like it.

Both examples have a "forward looking" and "not there yet" feeling.
They present more as
"I have been learning a lot and I expect the knowledge to be useful in future"
rather than
"my current incredible levels of competence and omniscience are due to years of practical experience and real-world learning."

I'm not suggesting you actually say it that way :-).

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I definitely see what you're talking about with the "not there yet" feeling. Thank you! –  Asya Saryan Jan 24 '13 at 1:10
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